Camus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's desire to make everything seem concrete instead of dealing with emotions.
I have not seen similes/metaphors with negative connotations throughout the book; is this a legitimate thesis? If it works, it is a unique approach.
Corrections: "Negative connotation" is somewhat vague; along with "concrete" and "everything". What kind of emotions, or does that even matter? "Seem" is too wordy. Also, why is this important/how does it relate to the human experience?
Rewritten: Camus uses figurative language [possibly?] to illustrate Mersault's desire to not deal with his repressed emotions.
I agree with Elizabeth, this thesis needs context to back it up. Quotes? Maybe change "everything" to "circumstances", or simply word it differently.
Camus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's desire to understand his circumstances and their meaning instead of dealing with emotions.
Camus uses figurative language with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's desire to make his world purely physical and his desire to escape from emotional situations.
Not quite sure if there needs to be negative connotation. Connotation alone sounds fine. What is everything and what are Meursault's emotions? Also the book seems to barely use and similes/metaphors, so it would be hard to look deep into it with such little evidence. I also don't understand what is trying to be expressed. It needs to be clearer and have a point.
Camus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's desire to make everything seem concrete instead of dealing with emotions.
Camus uses similes and metaphors to illustrate pointless acts of murder and consequences.
I was not aware that the figurative language used in this book was full of negative connotations. I'm not quite sure I understand what this statement is getting at. What is trying to be said with the word "concrete"?
Camus uses the effect of simile and metaphor to illustrate the way in which humans suppress their emotions.
"everything seem concrete instead of dealing with emotions."
I think this part is worded awkwardly. I'm not sure what it means without proper context but...
Edit "Camus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's desire ignore his emotions by concentrating on the tangible.
As said above there needs to be more context behind the quote to understand it. However I have seen some figurative language throughout the Stranger. As said above the words "concrete", "dealing and "everything" are too vague. I would rephrase the beginning of the sentence. Camus uses a negative connotation of similes and metaphors to illustrate Meursault's desire to repress his emotions instead of experiencing them.
#1. I haven't seen too many metaphors/similes (it seems like Camus deliberately avoids them).
#2. "Concrete" is both vague and a metaphor itself which is a no-no.
#3. What effect does Meursault's desire to make everything 'concrete' have on the book?
#4. You may want to specify "his" emotions if that's what you're going for.
Rewrite: Camus' use of figurative language in a negative light illustrates Meursault's desire to avoid abstract emotions and focus on consistent, physical (desires?). Effect...
Firstly, metaphors and similes seem to appear very rarely in this book. Secondly, this is a wordy sentence. Thirdly, "make everything seem concrete" is a vague term.
Rewrite: Camus negative use of figurative language and imagery reflects Mersault's desire to focus on physicality.
I feel like the thesis needs to give an idea of what is being compared through the use of similes and metaphors. Is it people? Places? Events? Also you could take out "Meresault" make it apply more universally.
Through the use of similes and metaphors, Camus depicts [what is being compared] negatively, showing the human tendency to prefer dealing with the material instead of the emotional.
First half is good, the why part is a little confusing. Like Davis said, it is a little broad in the sense that it doesn't describe exactly what it is that Mersault is trying to avoid.
Camus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation in order to show the danger in becoming involved in emotionally stressful events.
First, make everything seem concrete is not what you would want in your thesis. Seem and concrete is a bad word choice and possibly a metaphor which you shouldn't put in themes. Secondly, there is not much use of similies or metaphors, so it will be difficult to back up this theme. Mine: Camus uses similies and metaphors to represent that one will escape his unwanted/uncomfortable feelings and turn more to the physical side of a scenario, where they feel more comfortable in.
As other people have mentioned, there are not a lot of metaphors or similes in the novel. I'm confused about how they have a negative connotation, but that might just be me. I would say what metaphors and similes were used or somehow specify which ones are talked about.
Rewrite: Camus uses similes and metaphors to demonstrate how Meursault ignores (supresses maybe? I'm not sure of the right word) his emotions and instead focuses on physical details.
This still needs a "so what" but I'm not sure what that would be.
First off, Camus does not use very meny similies or metaphors. Second, it is hard to say a simile or metaphor has a connotation. Third, concrete is not a good word to use. Fourth, "dealing with emotions" needs to be explained. Fifth, lack of structure and running from emotions is and odd thing to link.
I would say, "Camus' use of negative descriptive connotations highlights Mersault's desire for a linear, controlled path, free of the pressure and stress of emotions."
I think concrete is a poor word choice for what you mean to say. "Unchanging" would probably be a better word. Like other people are saying, I'm not sure that there are metaphors with negative connotations but if you prove us wrong, this is a good, debatable idea. Clear up the language ambiguity and you're golden.
Camus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's ignorance of how life involves not only physical problems, but emotional issues as well.
The last part is confusing. It should be easier to read. The word 'seem' isn't necessary.
Camus uses similes and metaphors with negative connotations to illustrate the way Meursault simplifies descriptions and doesn't overcrowd them with emotions.
I think this is an interesting thesis, but I'm not sure it has the evidence to back it up. Also, it doesn't mention what this means for the human condition. Rewrite: Camus uses harsh imagery to show how Meursault masks his emotions with details in life, proving that humans often avoid dealing directly with these feelings.
This is a good start, "everything" however us a very vague term and need to be specified or explained. I also think that the last part has a sentence structure issue and I am having a hard time understanding it. I would reword it byu saying: Albert Camus uses similied and metaphors to illustrate how humans often avoid facing their problems for their own benefit to prevent inner conflict.
What does "everything" and "concrete" mean? Does "emotions" refer to Meursault's emotions? Where's the "so what?"
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Will edit with "so what" later.
I have not seen similes/metaphors with negative connotations throughout the book; is this a legitimate thesis? If it works, it is a unique approach.
ReplyDeleteCorrections: "Negative connotation" is somewhat vague; along with "concrete" and "everything". What kind of emotions, or does that even matter? "Seem" is too wordy. Also, why is this important/how does it relate to the human experience?
Rewritten: Camus uses figurative language [possibly?] to illustrate Mersault's desire to not deal with his repressed emotions.
I agree with Elizabeth, this thesis needs context to back it up. Quotes?
ReplyDeleteMaybe change "everything" to "circumstances", or simply word it differently.
Camus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's desire to understand his circumstances and their meaning instead of dealing with emotions.
"Concrete" and "dealing with" do not seem specific enough to me.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses negatively connotated figurative language to illustrate Meursault's desire to remove himself and escape from emotions he is feeling.
"everything" is too vague.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses figurative language with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's desire to make his world purely physical and his desire to escape from emotional situations.
lots of vague and unneeded words in this thesis.
ReplyDeleteseems is not needed, while everything and emotions are vague. Clarify what being concrete means?
Camus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's desire to avoid emotional situations.
Not quite sure if there needs to be negative connotation. Connotation alone sounds fine. What is everything and what are Meursault's emotions? Also the book seems to barely use and similes/metaphors, so it would be hard to look deep into it with such little evidence. I also don't understand what is trying to be expressed. It needs to be clearer and have a point.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's desire to make everything seem concrete instead of dealing with emotions.
Camus uses similes and metaphors to illustrate pointless acts of murder and consequences.
I was not aware that the figurative language used in this book was full of negative connotations. I'm not quite sure I understand what this statement is getting at. What is trying to be said with the word "concrete"?
ReplyDeleteCamus uses the effect of simile and metaphor to illustrate the way in which humans suppress their emotions.
"everything seem concrete instead of dealing with emotions."
ReplyDeleteI think this part is worded awkwardly. I'm not sure what it means without proper context but...
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"Camus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's desire ignore his emotions by concentrating on the tangible.
As said above there needs to be more context behind the quote to understand it. However I have seen some figurative language throughout the Stranger.
ReplyDeleteAs said above the words "concrete", "dealing and "everything" are too vague. I would rephrase the beginning of the sentence.
Camus uses a negative connotation of similes and metaphors to illustrate Meursault's desire to repress his emotions instead of experiencing them.
#1. I haven't seen too many metaphors/similes (it seems like Camus deliberately avoids them).
ReplyDelete#2. "Concrete" is both vague and a metaphor itself which is a no-no.
#3. What effect does Meursault's desire to make everything 'concrete' have on the book?
#4. You may want to specify "his" emotions if that's what you're going for.
Rewrite: Camus' use of figurative language in a negative light illustrates Meursault's desire to avoid abstract emotions and focus on consistent, physical (desires?). Effect...
Firstly, metaphors and similes seem to appear very rarely in this book.
ReplyDeleteSecondly, this is a wordy sentence.
Thirdly, "make everything seem concrete" is a vague term.
Rewrite: Camus negative use of figurative language and imagery reflects Mersault's desire to focus on physicality.
The main issue with this quote is that it is vague, like everyone else said, so it is hard to fix. And I'm not sure if "negative" is accurate.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses figurative language to show that humans try to relate what they cannot understand to their own experiences.
I feel like the thesis needs to give an idea of what is being compared through the use of similes and metaphors. Is it people? Places? Events? Also you could take out "Meresault" make it apply more universally.
ReplyDeleteThrough the use of similes and metaphors, Camus depicts [what is being compared] negatively, showing the human tendency to prefer dealing with the material instead of the emotional.
First half is good, the why part is a little confusing. Like Davis said, it is a little broad in the sense that it doesn't describe exactly what it is that Mersault is trying to avoid.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation in order to show the danger in becoming involved in emotionally stressful events.
First, make everything seem concrete is not what you would want in your thesis. Seem and concrete is a bad word choice and possibly a metaphor which you shouldn't put in themes.
ReplyDeleteSecondly, there is not much use of similies or metaphors, so it will be difficult to back up this theme.
Mine: Camus uses similies and metaphors to represent that one will escape his unwanted/uncomfortable feelings and turn more to the physical side of a scenario, where they feel more comfortable in.
Good beginning, but I find the last part a bit confusing. Does everything need to be concrete, or just painful events?
ReplyDeleteCamus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation to express Mersault's desired for emotional events to be more concrete.
How do these similes and metaphors even relate to making things concrete? Figurative language is very un-concrete.
ReplyDeleteCamus' extensive descriptions of setting and characters shows humans' desire to deal with physical things over emotional issues.
As other people have mentioned, there are not a lot of metaphors or similes in the novel. I'm confused about how they have a negative connotation, but that might just be me. I would say what metaphors and similes were used or somehow specify which ones are talked about.
ReplyDeleteRewrite: Camus uses similes and metaphors to demonstrate how Meursault ignores (supresses maybe? I'm not sure of the right word) his emotions and instead focuses on physical details.
This still needs a "so what" but I'm not sure what that would be.
First off, Camus does not use very meny similies or metaphors. Second, it is hard to say a simile or metaphor has a connotation. Third, concrete is not a good word to use. Fourth, "dealing with emotions" needs to be explained. Fifth, lack of structure and running from emotions is and odd thing to link.
ReplyDeleteI would say, "Camus' use of negative descriptive connotations highlights Mersault's desire for a linear, controlled path, free of the pressure and stress of emotions."
I think concrete is a poor word choice for what you mean to say. "Unchanging" would probably be a better word. Like other people are saying, I'm not sure that there are metaphors with negative connotations but if you prove us wrong, this is a good, debatable idea. Clear up the language ambiguity and you're golden.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation to illustrate Meursault's ignorance of how life involves not only physical problems, but emotional issues as well.
Why does Camus do this?(So what)
ReplyDeleteWhat is he trying to say about Meursault's desire to avoid dealing with emotions?
Camus uses similes and metaphors with a negative connotation with the purpose of illustrating Meursault's desire to avoid dealing with emotions.
The last part is confusing. It should be easier to read. The word 'seem' isn't necessary.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses similes and metaphors with negative connotations to illustrate the way Meursault simplifies descriptions and doesn't overcrowd them with emotions.
I think this is an interesting thesis, but I'm not sure it has the evidence to back it up. Also, it doesn't mention what this means for the human condition.
ReplyDeleteRewrite: Camus uses harsh imagery to show how Meursault masks his emotions with details in life, proving that humans often avoid dealing directly with these feelings.
This is a good start, "everything" however us a very vague term and need to be specified or explained. I also think that the last part has a sentence structure issue and I am having a hard time understanding it. I would reword it byu saying: Albert Camus uses similied and metaphors to illustrate how humans often avoid facing their problems for their own benefit to prevent inner conflict.
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