I think that "the repetition of contrast" is somewhat confusing.
Camus contrasts the colors black and white repeatedly to show the conflict between what is considered to be socially acceptable and what is personally desired.
I agree with Shannon. Also, I might be wrong, but I'm missing the "so what" of the thesis.
Camus contrasts the colors black and white to illustrate the conflict between what is considered socially acceptable and what is personally desired. He shows that there must be a balance between the two or else one will experience isolation.
Amazing thesis, but I think you could get rid of the whole "repetition" idea all together. It seems rather obvious that this contrast would have to show up multiple times in order to be fully supported. I also think you should specify what exactly is being contrasted. Is it just the colors in general or objects that are that color or the lighting of the setting? Camus contrasts the colors black and white to express the conflict between society's standard and one's personal desires.
I'm pretty sure that social acceptability versus personal desires is on our "too obvious" list, but regardless, this thesis is a great start.
I agree with Kylee that the idea of repetition is unnecessary.
In "The Stranger", Camus uses the contrast between black and white to show the conflict of what is socially acceptable and what Meursault personally desires.
Repetition isn't needed. It is good, but it needs a point to it.
Camus uses the contrast of black and white to illustrate the conflict between what is socially acceptable and what is personally desired. [So what is the point?]
I think that this is a great start to a thesis however where does all the other color fit in? Do the other colors have anything to add to this thesis statement that could help find the "why" point? I would change the sentence structure because it doesn't really make sense to me. What type of conflict is it? Is it an inner conflict of Meursault or is it a external conflict between Meursault and the expectations of society? Camus uses the contrast between black white and color to show Meursault's inner conflict between behaviors that are socially acceptable and personal desires.
Good thesis. "Repetition" is awkward, and the impact is not clear enough. Where does this conflict manifest itself? Is this character to character type conflict or internal conflict or seen through setting paradoxes?
(Parenthesis give an example of what should be done)
Rewrite: Camus contrasts black and white repeatedly to show (internal) conflicts between what is socially acceptable and what is personally desired. (Ultimately, this becomes the determining factor in assigning a ranked value [or purpose] in life).
"repetition" should be changed to "motif". In some cases black and white are juxtaposed, so it is possible that "juxtaposed" could be used instead of "contrast" but that really depends on the quotes being used. Reword to connect to more of a universal theme.
Camus uses the motif of contrasting black and white to emphasize the internal conflict that arises when an individual's personal desires do not match up with what is acceptable by society.
Like almost everyone else said, the word "repetition" was not used well. It is a good idea, but the wording can be changed.
Camus uses contrast between the colors black and white throughout the book in order to represent the conflict between social order and the inner desires of the individual.
Good, but a little wordy. Cut "repetition of"...I also agree that the "so what" seems to be missing, this may be true of the book, but how does it express Camus's world view?
Camus uses the contrast between black and white to show conflict between what is socially acceptable and personal desires to express that the two things are opposites and will never mix.
It's been said many times, but there is not much of a "why". You don't necessarily need to get rid of "repetition of" if you reword the entire thesis.
Camus projects that socially acceptable actions and personal desires cannot occur at the same time through the contrast of black and white because with one, the other cannot exist.
I would elaborate about what the effect of this conflict between personal desires and what is socially acceptable. This idea sounds good, but it might be sort of obvious.
Rewrite: Camus repeats the motif of black and white to show the confict one feels as they try to reconcile their personal desires with society's standards.
Camus' repitious uses of contrast between black and white shows conflict between what is socially acceptable and what is personally desired by Meursault.
It could be less wordy. Contrast between black and white is repeated in The Strangers to show confict between political correctness and personal desires.
Excellent observation, but there are problems. I think the social acceptance part was in our list of obvious themes, and also there is really no mention of how this repetition shows something about the human condition. Others mentioned that it is a bit wordy, and this is true but first the content needs fixing. I like Emily's thesis(above) but maybe a clarification of what society's standards are.
The thesis is missing the "so what" question aswell as using the unessesary term "repetition" I think that some of the words are also vague and can be specified. I rewrote the thesis as followed: Albert Camus expresses his world philosophy in "The Stranger" by contrasting the colors black and white to demonstrate the difference between society's standards and Mersault's personal desires.
I think that "the repetition of contrast" is somewhat confusing.
ReplyDeleteCamus contrasts the colors black and white repeatedly to show the conflict between what is considered to be socially acceptable and what is personally desired.
I agree with Shannon. Also, I might be wrong, but I'm missing the "so what" of the thesis.
ReplyDeleteCamus contrasts the colors black and white to illustrate the conflict between what is considered socially acceptable and what is personally desired. He shows that there must be a balance between the two or else one will experience isolation.
It would fit better to say the "motif" rather than repetition. "Personally desired" also throws it off a bit.
ReplyDeleteRewritten: Camus uses the motif of contrasting black and white to reveal how conflict develops through social acceptance and personal desire.
Amazing thesis, but I think you could get rid of the whole "repetition" idea all together. It seems rather obvious that this contrast would have to show up multiple times in order to be fully supported. I also think you should specify what exactly is being contrasted. Is it just the colors in general or objects that are that color or the lighting of the setting?
ReplyDeleteCamus contrasts the colors black and white to express the conflict between society's standard and one's personal desires.
I'm pretty sure that social acceptability versus personal desires is on our "too obvious" list, but regardless, this thesis is a great start.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Kylee that the idea of repetition is unnecessary.
In "The Stranger", Camus uses the contrast between black and white to show the conflict of what is socially acceptable and what Meursault personally desires.
I agree with Anthony...what is the theme here?
ReplyDeleteIn "The Stranger", Camus contrasts black and white to represent the conflict between what is socially acceptable and what an individual desires.
Get rid of the repetition part, and add what is trying to be proven here.
ReplyDeleteCamus contrasts black and white to portray the conflict between what an individual wants and what is socially acceptable.
Repetition isn't needed. It is good, but it needs a point to it.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses the contrast of black and white to illustrate the conflict between what is socially acceptable and what is personally desired. [So what is the point?]
I think the thesis misses the point "why?"
ReplyDeleteWhy does Camus show the conflict between "what is socially acceptable and what is personally desired"?
Shows how your desires take precedence? Show how society keeps us from being savages? (<- Get it?)
I think that this is a great start to a thesis however where does all the other color fit in? Do the other colors have anything to add to this thesis statement that could help find the "why" point?
ReplyDeleteI would change the sentence structure because it doesn't really make sense to me.
What type of conflict is it? Is it an inner conflict of Meursault or is it a external conflict between Meursault and the expectations of society?
Camus uses the contrast between black white and color to show Meursault's inner conflict between behaviors that are socially acceptable and personal desires.
Good thesis. "Repetition" is awkward, and the impact is not clear enough. Where does this conflict manifest itself? Is this character to character type conflict or internal conflict or seen through setting paradoxes?
ReplyDelete(Parenthesis give an example of what should be done)
Rewrite: Camus contrasts black and white repeatedly to show (internal) conflicts between what is socially acceptable and what is personally desired. (Ultimately, this becomes the determining factor in assigning a ranked value [or purpose] in life).
This thesis is good, but as previously stated there is a "so what" aspect. You need to go a step further, and provide a "why does it matter."
ReplyDeleteAlso, "repetition of contrast" sounds awkward.
"repetition" should be changed to "motif". In some cases black and white are juxtaposed, so it is possible that "juxtaposed" could be used instead of "contrast" but that really depends on the quotes being used. Reword to connect to more of a universal theme.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses the motif of contrasting black and white to emphasize the internal conflict that arises when an individual's personal desires do not match up with what is acceptable by society.
Like almost everyone else said, the word "repetition" was not used well. It is a good idea, but the wording can be changed.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses contrast between the colors black and white throughout the book in order to represent the conflict between social order and the inner desires of the individual.
Good, but a little wordy. Cut "repetition of"...I also agree that the "so what" seems to be missing, this may be true of the book, but how does it express Camus's world view?
ReplyDeleteCamus uses the contrast between black and white to show conflict between what is socially acceptable and personal desires to express that the two things are opposites and will never mix.
Repetition of is wordy and there could be more "so what".
ReplyDeleteCamus repeatedly contrasts black and white to show the conflict between society and individuality, and how the two cannot occur simultaneously.
"Repetition of contrast" is an ugly term. Instead I would just say "Camus' contrast"
ReplyDeleteSo I'd rewrite this thesis as
Camus' contrast between black and white represent conflicted personal desires with society's expectations.
It's been said many times, but there is not much of a "why". You don't necessarily need to get rid of "repetition of" if you reword the entire thesis.
ReplyDeleteCamus projects that socially acceptable actions and personal desires cannot occur at the same time through the contrast of black and white because with one, the other cannot exist.
I would elaborate about what the effect of this conflict between personal desires and what is socially acceptable. This idea sounds good, but it might be sort of obvious.
ReplyDeleteRewrite: Camus repeats the motif of black and white to show the confict one feels as they try to reconcile their personal desires with society's standards.
How does Camus do this?
ReplyDeleteWhy does he do this?
Camus' repitious uses of contrast between black and white shows conflict between what is socially acceptable and what is personally desired by Meursault.
It could be less wordy.
ReplyDeleteContrast between black and white is repeated in The Strangers to show confict between political correctness and personal desires.
Excellent observation, but there are problems. I think the social acceptance part was in our list of obvious themes, and also there is really no mention of how this repetition shows something about the human condition. Others mentioned that it is a bit wordy, and this is true but first the content needs fixing.
ReplyDeleteI like Emily's thesis(above) but maybe a clarification of what society's standards are.
The thesis is missing the "so what" question aswell as using the unessesary term "repetition"
ReplyDeleteI think that some of the words are also vague and can be specified.
I rewrote the thesis as followed:
Albert Camus expresses his world philosophy in "The Stranger" by contrasting the colors black and white to demonstrate the difference between society's standards and Mersault's personal desires.