Camus uses actions to describe and characterize characters instead of using direct description to illustrate the importance of actions in comparison to the person someone plays themself up to be, in reference to the judgement of character and morals.
Too long of a sentence, or at least add more comas! Basically, I am confused by the entire thesis (no offense). :( What kind of "actions" does Camus use? "Describe and characterize" can be condensed down to one or the other. "Direct description" is vague. "Plays themself up to be" is a metaphor. What do you mean by that? What is the person judging?
ReplyDeleteRewritten: Camus' use of conflict demonstrates how people are judged on how they act, rather than their character [or values?].
This is unnecessarily wordy.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses describes characters through their actions instead of directly describing them to emphasize how individuals are judged upon their actions instead of their values.
I don't think that's true though. Salamano and Raymond both abuse others but society perceives them differently.
If it's the other way around and values are what society judges people on, then I don't see how Camus would illustrate this by describe others through their actions. I think he'd try to downplay it.
"The judgement of character and morals" doesn't seem to add to the thesis. Maybe reword?
ReplyDeleteCamus uses actions to describe and characterize characters instead of using direct description. This is to illustrate the importance of actions in comparison to the person someone portrays privately versus the person other people see publicly.
Yeah the whole things is wordy. The phrase "characterize characters" is really awkward too. And I'm not exactly sure if all of the characters are described by their actions. I think this might only apply to Meursault.
ReplyDeleteAnd I think I agree with Anthony, but only to an extent. I think that society judges people based on their values, but those values are determined by people's actions. Because Meursault is never able to come up with a convincing argument for his actions regrding his mother and the Arab, his values are assumed to be flawed.
Camus uses the actions of a character to emphasize the idea that society judges a person's values based on their actions.
That may not be the original intention of your thesis, so you may want to clarify what that is.
This thesis is very wordy. I think that Camus uses a character's actions to show that people are judged by their actions rather than by what they say or how they view themselves.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses the actions of a character the develop their characterization in order to illustrate that society will judge a person and their moral values based on what they do, rather than what they say.
Too long. I don't think the last part is needed, about character and morals.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses actions as characterization instead of using direct description to illustrate the importance of actions in comparison to what one says about themselves.
extra-ordinarily long. i dont see what the last part has to do with any of it...im actually quite confused.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses actions to characterize characters rather than direct description to display the importantance of backing up ones words with actions.
There seems to be an add on sentence. It seems to be focus on one thing, then jumps onto another topic. It should only focus on one thing; short and to the point.
ReplyDeleteAnd what actions and what characters are being referred to? I'm not quite sure if Camus is trying to imply moral codes, if he is I can think of the execution and killing, but that should be mentioned.
Camus illustrates Meursault's murder and execution to emphasize that anyone who takes away someone's will to live will be punished.
(Still needs edit)
So this is basically just saying that actions speak louder than words, except in a runon sentence. Ok, but (addressing the end of the thesis) is Mersault presenting himself in a way that will make others favor him, or in the way that he sees fit? To me, it doesn't really seem to matter to Mersault how he appears to others. I don't really find this theme relevent.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses Mersault's internal conflict- or lack thereof- to bring to light what societal values deem appropriate versus what the individual wants.
This is somewhat akin to what this thesis originally said, but it is more applicable to the novel.
Conceptually, I think this is a good thesis. I might be a little long, but it's not that bad. You could go all Hemingway and cut it down.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses actions to characterize characters instead descriptions to illustrate the importance of actions in comparison to a person's image of themselves.
As redundant as it may be, it's wordy blah blah blah, it distracts from the point, blah blah blah, but at least the idea makes sense.
ReplyDeleteRewrite: The use of actions to characterize people exemplifies the importance of actions over internal thoughts.
I agree this is a bit long. In the first part of the sentence you are basically describing flat characters. It is too wordy. "The person someone plays themself up to be" this is a bit confusing I don't understand what you are trying to convey here.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses actions of flat characters instead of direct description to show the importance of actions in comparison to a persons reputation. Camus does this by refrencing how the flat characters are judged in reference to their morals and character.
My version is a bit long too however I didn't want to get rid of anything that was important.
This thesis is obviously quite wordy, I would reccomend separating out into two sentences. Conceptually however, this is a very good thesis.
ReplyDeleteRewrite: Camus uses the actions of characters instead of description or thoughts to demonstrate the ethical beliefs of individuals.
*recommend.
ReplyDeleteAgain, very wordy but good idea. The very last part seems tacked on but is one of the more important concepts in what you are trying to prove, integrate it better into the thesis. There is also talk about judgment but no mention of who is doing the judging, is it society?
ReplyDeleteCamus uses action as opposed to direct description to characterize individuals to illustrate that society's perceived value of an individual is based on their actions rather than how they see themselves.
Very wordy. Cut out some of the extra explanations. Also, like Davis said, be specific as to who or what is showing judgment.
ReplyDeleteCamus characterizes the characters in The Stranger through events that they are invlolved in to show the importance of actions, rather than opinions tainted by society's expectations.
This entire thesis confuses me...Needs to be much more precise in wording and ideas.
ReplyDeleteMy attempt at a rewrite...
Camus uses actions instead of direct description to emphasize the importance of actions and to downplay the facade that people create to avoid judgement from others...
This thesis is very wordy and could be broken down into two sentences. I think the idea is good, the wording just needs to be fine-tuned. I would also get more specific about which characters are described this way or pick one to use as an example.
ReplyDeleteRewrite: Camus describes the chracters (should be specified) through their actions and not direct description in order to show one's actions, not feelings or motivations, are judged by society.
I didn't get that theme at all, so I am going to edit Kellsie's. The only thing that it needs is clarification on how that downplays the façade.And actions are important to what?
ReplyDeleteCamus characterizes his characters by how they act, not how Meursault perceives them, to emphasize that a person's actions show their true personality more than how society thinks of them.
This sounds like the work of Sean Sakaguchi. If the concept is less wordy, simplified, or demonstrated, then I would probably agree with this. But seeing as this is a blog I can't do that. So I honestly would overhaul this to the point where it might not send the same message. So I'll edit Kellsie's like Isabel did.
ReplyDeleteCamus uses actions instead of direct description to mask a person's hatred for judgement placed upon them by others.
Being that I wrote this last second because I didn't want to post my other ones,I will adjust this to be less wordy and get my point across better. It's not neccesarily supposed to be judgement, but rather using how the reader picks up on ideas to highlight Camus' already known obsession with importance on physical aspects.
ReplyDeleteCamus characterizes characters to the reader through actions instead of description to show importance on physical action compared to inner thoughts.
Can take out "to describe" characterizing a character= describing them.
ReplyDeleteAdd a "why" part. What is the reason Camus does this.
Your thesis doesnt need to be 1 sentence(although it can be) I would break a long thesis like this into multiple sentences to be more clear and precise.
Rather then using direct description, Camus uses actions to characterize characters in order to illustrate the importance of actions in comparison to the person one believes themself to be.
Really long!
ReplyDeleteIs it possible to simplify?
Camus uses characterization to illustrate the importance of actions rather than descriptions.
Camus characterizes characters to the reader through actions instead of description to show importance on physical action compared to inner thoughts.
ReplyDeleteSince the original thesis has been torn to shreds, I'm analyzing the one Travis wrote. I think this is an excellent idea, but "characterizes characters" feels awkward.
Rewrite: Camus uses characterization through actions, not descriptions, which shows the importance of someone's physical deeds rather than their thoughts.
I like the idea but the thesis is very wordy and is lacking sentence structure. "Characterizing characters needs to be adjusted to the desciption of the characters or maybe the actions.
ReplyDeleteI would reword this thesis as followed:
Camus uses the actions of characters to show the importance of a person's physical actions in contrast to their thoughts and emotions.